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This week, we return to our hero, flushed with lust when he meets his ex-lover. Having not seen her for quite some time, he is finding it more of a challenge than he had predicted.
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Without answering, she slowly stood, turning to face me. Inches separating us.
Could she smell my fear?
Maybe.
Softly cupping my cheek with her hand, she lent in, her warm full lips softly meeting mine.
I think I almost died.
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Read the last 3 snippets for this work in progress, if you would like to catch up:
…..Six Sentence Sunday 36…..Six Sentence Sunday 37…..SIx Sentence Sunday 38
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Excellent tension and sensuality, Alix. Great six!
Sexy Six! Love the minimal style. Gets straight to the point.
Lovely six! Wonderful description.
I love how she takes charge. Great six! :)
She’s gentle and eager to learn more about “taming” those fears. Lovely! (as always)
Oh, so sensual! Love it!
“I think I almost died…” Great line.
Ooh, swoony hero! I love it when the men get all overwhelmed.
Lovely work Alix.
I would suggest that you make the following 2 changes:
“Without answering, she slowly stood, turning to face me; inches separated us.”
And either
“I think I died.” or “I almost died.” for more punch.
Nice work.
Your a champion! I think it does reach a better flow with the changes:
Without answering, she slowly stood, turning to face me; inches separated us.
Could she smell my fear?
Maybe.
Softly cupping my cheek with her hand, she lent in, her warm full lips softly meeting mine.
I almost died.
Great six! I like a man who’s overwhelmed.
Very sexy six, Alix! I love the inner dialogue.
Very intresting and sexy. He sounds complicated. Love it!
Wonderful tension in these sparse six. That last line is excellent.
I love hearing the man’s POV, and writing it is always so different from a woman’s style. And I bet she smells more than fear. She probably smells lust. :)
Such a sensuous snippet. And I love watching the editing tweaks happening in real time. :)
I really appreciate the feed back, especially when it is so practical, I think he really improved it too.
Thank you, lovely Lady.
I love, love, love that last line. Beautiful and perfect!
Very nice! Love that he “almost died”! Great six!
Very nice! He might not leave this unscathed.
Ooh, nicely sensuous!
LOVE that last line. Very sensual!
One word: heavenly.
Fantastic six, Alix. I really love your writing. :)
Very good. Really liked his last line x
Great post, l can feel his emotions!
Tasty stuff. ;D
It’s the leaning that gets me every time . . .
Wow. Time did nothing to put out the fire here. Sounds like there’s plenty of heat left between them!
Aww, bless his heart. I love reading men’s thoughts when they’re vulnerable.
Sensual, intriguing, great six!
I like how you make him – ok can’t think of a good word – but not afraid or ignorant of his emotions
Oh, sweet Jesus on the cross! This guy needs to be and WILL be loved. Great six, Alix.
I think I could hear his heart beating, or was that mine :) what a moment you’ve captured
Oh, you have me swooning over this man. You’ve put us right into his heart. Beautiful.
Leaves me wondering why EX-lover.
Love your short six! They are minimal, as someone else mentioned, but they pack a punch! I’m hooked. :)
Oh! I love being in his head. Well done.
wonderfully sensual. Excellent.
Very sensual! And I love when a romance has a male POV.
Intriguing and sensuous six ~ wonderful!
I love his vulnerability. Lovely six, Alix.
This mix of desire/fear is very provocative. You wring every bit of tension from these six little sentences and it is hot.
Sensual! Intense! Awesome!
Very lovely and sensual!
So sensuous and the sparsness of your writing style just makes it all the better. Lovely six.
Sexy six, Alix. :)
Hot six. Lots of juicy tension!
The last line is free-fall of a very pleasant kind.
Spare, sparse, elegant–I second everyone who used those words.
Sensual six, and loved the last line.
You make emotion seem effortless. I could feel what he was feeling… another excellent six.
That is so sweet and sensual, packed into just six lines!
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