My first ever submission to Six Sentence Sunday, recommended to me by the wonderful Lorien Velez.
This is a piece plucked from a my first erotic short story, which isn’t quite ready to go live, I’m not confident enough with it yet to put it up, please reply if you feel like it, I’m in the need of some feedback – I hope you enjoy. Ax
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They hadn’t really made it past the front door, it had unfolded, urgent and lustful. He had fucked her hard, a primal urge he couldn’t control: the heavy sweet smell of sex still lingering in the room. It was holding him, caressing him, keeping his head spinning, and heart pounding; but she was gone.
He could hear the shower running, the warm steam dancing to it’s own seductive tune. Her silhouette had stopped him from moving any closer, his eyes drawn to her form, her nipples pert on the crest of her breast, the soft curve of her back, all of her was swirling and tumbling around in his thoughts.
He was going to taste her again, but now he was going to take his time.
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Especially for Gayle Ramage, I get lost in his eyes.

Great first six! Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday!
Hi, and welcome!
I like the descriptions in this piece, especially the line about the steam. And all I can say with regards to the last line – ‘what a lucky girl!’ (especially if the guy looks anything like Ralph Fiennes.. well, he did when I was reading it anyway, lol).
Gayle
You won’t believe what my laptop background image is…I posted it under the six. Ax
Oh, we obviously both have Fienne taste in men!
Those eyes…..!
Very hot! Welcome to SSS. Love your six. :)
Welcome to SSS. Nice and hot six
Nice six! I like how he decided to take their next encounter slower. Welcome to SSS!
Welcome to SSS! I Really like your use of alliteration to create emotion and movement. Very evocative.
Thank you very much. I really appreciate your thoughts.
Mmmm-hmm! This was great!
Loved ‘the warm steam dancing to it’s own seductive tune.’
Awesome pic of Ralph! This was a Hot, greedy, Six! You write lust & sensuality beautifully!
Hot and steamy. Also lyrical. Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday.
Very nicely done–great imagery!
pretty steamy! Welcome to SSS!
Welcome to SSS – great start! ;)
I’d never heard of SSS before, but I have to say you’ve got a sexy voice. A few problems with passive voice and punctuation, but I think you have talent for sensual erotic romance. Good luck
Wow! Very sensual and beautiful. Very nice writing!
Yay another newbie – I knew I was not alone :) Think I might need a cold shower after that – looking forward to the next slower sex…oops I mean six ;)
Hi Alix, great sexy six….plus loving the comments above ha ha Dave :))
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